Reviewed by Robert
Alien Strike
Reviewed by Robert
Alien strike is the second piece I have read from Clare and it is better written that the last. I never give the story away with a review so you will need to read it to see if you agree with me.
This story is a good, quick read. It's plus's are that you are into the story immediately, little or no pre-amble and the character's attitudes are believable. Like Clare's other story this one also finishes too soon. I would have enjoyed reading more about the alien and its tiny craft than about the camping, as this was interesting. Clare writes from the perspective of a 9-10 year old and as such this story needs to be read that way. Fast, little description and all action. Though I do find that she does posses a good grasp of language and at times uses it cleverly. Clare: Try not to rush through your story, give the characters time to have some fun and explore the possibilities within the scenes you create. Everything is here for a realy good story, so take your time re-write it keeping the character firmly in mind. Record personal responses to the alien craft. The ideas and thoughts of the main character and as it's written from a youger point of view, some fanciful dreaming about the future would not be a-miss. Well done Clare. Keep up the good work.
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