Reviewed by Robert
The Firestorms
Reviewed by Robert
As an avid SF writer I found the idea of this story interesting but unfortuantely the plot was weak or non existant. The characters mearly chess pieces being pushed about within underdeveloped scences. The scene with the father is pointless, having no bearing on the story what so ever and the following scenes move too fast for adequate understanding. What I have read here is the smatterings of a good idea without an adequate story to support it. Points to consider, characterisation. Find some good books on the subject and read what is required.
Scene setting; The scene is integral to the character development not just a back drop. The scene itself is a character interacting with the main characters. Plot: The motivations of this story are good but light. Decide what is the focus of the story, The Fire Storms or the love relationship. Both are treated as minor aspects in this piece. Another major point is that a Science Fiction story takes more than strange names and alien landscapes. The technology here is not well developed and the pshycological science is missed altogether. This story is an interesting read and would sound a lot better with a careful re-write with more time spent on the points I have mentioned. If the author can I suggest you get a copy of Orson Scott Cards "Writing SF and Fantasy". Sorry if I have been harsh on this story but this writer's future development depends on this kind or review.
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