Reviewed by Robert

I found this story rather strange in an off beat way. I read this story twice and was still left with a rather odd feeling at the end. The use of narative verse is one of my pet dislikes and it is used freely in this story, where dialogue (internalisation of thoughts if we get pedantic) intersects. The character in this story is set up well but the story itself failed to enlighten me on the actual subject, perhaps not really a good move when writing short fiction.

If the story's main focus was on the principle character then the subject of the story is wasted. If it was removed and replaced with any other improbable happening it would still sound the same. If the young man was faced with a real situation, a real life challenge then the personal problems and oddities he possesses would be more accesable to the reader and some empathy can be formed to allow better emotional involvement.

Interseting tale, a little frustrating at times but generally quite well written.