Reviewed by Robert

Top start this review off I would like to say I enjoyed reading this tale and would indeed encourage others to read it also.

Now we get down to the rub: I found most of the naration distracting, I prefer my short stories to be told from a single point of view. Multiple view here tended to weaken the character.

At one stage there is a gun shot, but the recations of the bartender are not recorded, might be something to look at? I also found the red-neck's not quite red-neck enough. Give them some nastiness that befits their kind, a pinch on the backside, a lick of the lips maybe. Buddy turns out to be too insipid and not even worth the effort to read about, try giving him some more back bone to match the bone in his trousers. Work more on the ending to create a deeper feeling for the main character, that way the twist at the end is more satisfying.

Good writing overall, typical of Zalman's work but not his best.