Reviewed by Larry
The Things You Remember
Reviewed by Larry
This story is nice way to revive some of those pleasant memories of childhood. Even if you never owned a go-cart, or even driven in one, you may well be reliving events from your youth after reading this story. ( For me it was riding horses in the fields near the farm where we lived when I was a boy.) As a tool for jogging memories of youth, this story is a success.
The opening paragraphs in this story are very concise, and very well written. You get a good feel of the scene and the characters. After that, I found the excessive use of dialogue to be intrusive and numbing. This slice-of-life story would have worked better using the detached POV employed in the early parts of the story. Unfortunately, for some reason, the author felt a need to justify the POV he chose, by giving the narrator identity in the final paragraphs. Not necessary. My suggestion would be to touch up the dialogue (replace a lot of it with narrative), can the "I am the narrator" part, and lick a stamp and send it off to Reader's Digest.
Reviewed by © Larry
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