Reviewed by Richard

"The Long, Last Ride" tells the story of five bikers who make a final run for a friend who passed away. This story has promise, but fails to keep it�s end of the bargain. First off, the story lacks energy as it is loaded with passive phrases. The narrator is the only voice throughout the story. This technique does not allow any action to unfold, or the reader to get to know the other characters. When other characters are quoted, it is without quotation marks, as are song titles. (Which doesn�t really matter, as the songs are clich� here and the band�s name is spelled wrong).

Punctuation, what gives a writer�s voice intonation and inflection, is, at best, poorly used. Comma�s made rare appearances in the story, and when they did, they weren�t sure where to go. As far as punctuation is concerned, I would highly recommend that the author pick up a copy of "Elements of Style," one of the greatest handbooks for anyone who wants to write. This can also be found on the Internet.

The story took place in "Wells USA." In the USA, there are fifty states and there could be a "Wells" in all fifty. I could go on indefinitely. The point is, that the author needs to go back over his work once it is written and check it for grammatical and other errors.

The story is a good idea, but it definitely could stand some work.